This is my story for a fairytaleish contest hosted by Anna over at Yearning for Wonderland so here’s my picture and story in 299 words:
The Coat
“Please…don’t hurt me!” she begged, her soft -grey eyes widening in fear.
Clutching her basket tightly in her red-gloved hands she pressed her spine into the tree, but the towering man still advanced.
“That’s my brother’s coat you’re wearing.” Bitterness coated his words. “Where did you get it?”
She tensed, swallowing hard but not moving her eyes from his.
“I said, where’d you get it?” He repeated, venom spitting from his thin lips.
She shook her head.
“Answer me girl!” His voice rose booming through the silence of the wintry forest. “My brother’s gone…and you’ve got his coat! How did you get it?”
She licked her lips and spoke, almost inaudibly. “He…he gave it to me.”
“He what? He gave it to you! Foolish answer girl, he loved that coat!” He leered. “Spent many a night out with him and that coat…”
“It’s mine,” she began with defiance tinging her small voice.
“Yours? I don’t think so!” he barked at her.
She bent placing her basket on the floor and crossed her arms over the heavy, woollen coat, pulling its softness protectively around her tiny frame. A languid smile spread across his scarred face and he leaned in close. His breath, stinking of chewed tobacco, made her glare and he took a golden curl in his coarse fingers. “I think…I want that coat back.”
As he twirled her hair she met his lascivious gaze and smiled. “And I think I want yours.” Her voice was barely a whisper yet it chilled him and he tried to step back.
The altercation was skilled and quick, and not a moment later he lay dead and bloody, his brother’s grey, woollen coat his shroud. She pulled his leather jacket about her shoulders and replaced her scarlet gloves, deftly concealing her razor-sharp talons.
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I love this! Fantastic twist, I wan't expecting that!
This is wonderful!
Perfection!!!!!
Whoa, what a twist. Nice! Thank you for entering, Lisa!
Oh Lisa – wonderful!! You meted out the details in a delicious way :)) Really really well done!
I'm looking pretty wide-eyed right now! Did not expect that, but brilliant entry, Lisa!
Wow! That got me! Wasn't expecting that. Almost a film sequence there, Nice one Lisaxx
Wow! I didn't see that coming! Fantastic!
Gosh! I wasn't expecting such amazing comments…thank you so much for reading and enjoying! Loved reading everyone else's stories too, such diversity!
Fantastic!
LOVED it!
Beauty twist. Chilling.
What a lovely story!! I love it…just when I thought I knew what was coming…and she got him. I like it!
Excellent! I fancy myself some claws like that 🙂
I like this so much I had to read it twice. I love the twist. Intriguing and chilling. It's like a reverse Little Red Riding Hood. I loved it! Great job!
Skillfully done, both in the writing and her getting herself another coat! Wonderful.
Congratulations on your Honorable Mention win, Lisa! This story was chilling! http://yearningforwonderland.blogspot.com/2012/06/faerytaleish-pinterest-contest-winners.html
Lisa this is fantastic!! I was hanging on every word. Loved the ending. 🙂
Anna…thank you so much! Never had any kind of 'mention' for my writing, so I'm doing cartwheels! Fantastic contest and all in one week…you're the Supreme Dark Faery!
Wonderful story! I hadn't even picked up on the fact that, in the picture, she was wearing red gloves. 🙂