Five Sentence Fiction: Words

Photograph by Lisa Shambrook (Please do not use without permission)
The sudden explosion lit up the dusk and its thunder robbed him of his hearing as he was hurled across the dusty, gritty road; shock and shrapnel embedded its shards beneath his bloodied skin, but nothing stopped him crawling back across the detritus to circle the remains of the best friend he ever had. Confusion tore at his heart, but despite the ringing noise and acrid smoke he refused to leave, and settled mournfully in the middle of the rutted road to wait.
Black night loomed with shouts and gunshots, then chaos and blasts, and he flattened his ears and his body, and trembled by his master’s corpse. 
Dawn sneaked across the hills and he shivered in the morning cold, until soldiers, bloodied and weary, marched back along the road, and he growled, his hackles raised and ears sharp. He flinched as they approached and their brusque commands failed to touch him; it took a burly trooper’s bristly embrace and soft, whispered words to allow the dog to leave, but never forget.
go and read all the other stories…

15 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction: Words

  1. Ang

    Awwww… *sniffles* I'm not even a dog person and this totes got me right here *points at heart*. Beautiful, my friend. Just. BEAUTIFUL. *hugs*

  2. K R Smith

    My wife and I have 6 dogs, two of which are black labs that participated in field trials when they were younger. Their trainer is now training dogs for the military, mostly to find explosives and other materials. This reminded me of all that and some of the similar stories I've heard. Nice job!

  3. andyswordsandpictures

    What an interesting take on the prompt and what a beautiful way to show the horrors and cost of war. Riviting.

  4. sarahannhall

    I didn't know where you were going with this when I started reading. I love the way you built up the tension and diffused it with those whispered words.

  5. Mark K

    Lisa,Forgive me for not being around of late, but I took a break from blogging and stopped doing the FSS. This is an enticing piece of writing that draws the reader in deftly and moves through intensity and emotion with skill.You should feel very proud. Very well done 🙂


I'd love to hear from you...

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.